Week 2 Story - Good Luck Runs Out
Once upon a time a young man named Ezra learned the biggest lesson of his life.
Ezra is a smart man who utilizes his incredible skill of being discrete. He can get away with just about anything that comes to mind. His other complementary skill is being remarkably casual with any person he encounters. Ezra is intricate with his conversations. His charm was telling people what they wanted to hear. Throughout years, he noticed this unique glamour to his character and mastered it.
Ezra also had another remarkable skill. He was an excellent shoplifter. Ezra would go to the mall every other Saturday of the week. Knowing it was the busiest day of the week, Ezra would casually come across a few stores and pick up a few items. In fact, to keep it even more casual, Ezra liked to interact with the store workers. His thought process was that the open book in the room is the most trustworthy. You can more or less think about it as being the hidden in plain sight. He wanted to make sure workers encountered his presence.
It was Saturday morning and Ezra had a few errands to run. He decided that since he was already out and about that he would stop at the mall and grab an outfit for the night. Ezra went to his usual stores like his usual routine. At his last stop, Ezra saw an item he was looking for and casually worked his magic. Ezra was content and worked his way out towards the exit. Right before the doors, he peeks at a shirt that he noticed on the way in. He thinks about stealing the shirt or leaving with the items he has gotten so far. Up close to the shirt Ezra realizes that he has a similar shirt to it already, but he decides to steal it regardless. At the same time, a middle aged gentleman approaches Ezra. The gentleman didn't have a name or a uniform. The gentleman asks Ezra, "what are you doing in the store?" Ezra responds by saying that he was just looking for a birthday present. The gentleman didn't look appealed to Ezra. "I'm an undercover security and I've been watching you for some time now," said the gentleman. Ezra thinks about how he could have just left and been unseen if he hadn't stopped for that shirt. He begs the undercover authority to let him go that he hasn't done anything wrong. He attempts his magic once again. This time it fails.
Waiting for a police report to be filed in an office, Ezra thinks deeper about his situation. He realizes that people are usually on his side and not opposed to him. He felt awkward in this situation. He learns that he shouldn't be greedy or devious with his ways.
He also learns that he's about to head to the local police station.
Authors Note: The Cunning Crane and the Crab by W. H. D. Rouse was the original story. I completely changed everything, but the theme. I feel like the original source story was mainly directed for the theme, so that is why I decided to only keep the theme. I was just testing my creativity and attempted to come up with my own plot.
Bibliography. "The Cunning Crane and the Crab" from Jatakas by W. H. D. Rouse. Web source.
Crane Digging For Fish by Best English Stories.
AJ, your story is very interesting and I enjoyed reading your story. I think they way you changed up everything was very good and well written. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading more.
ReplyDeleteWow AJ what a fantastic revision of this story about the crane and the crab. You showed such an intense imagination in your blog post, it felt like I was part of the story. I really enjoyed how you took a plot about two animals and were able to adapt their behavior and charactereistics into a human being. There is a greater meaning behind that. Overall I believe you did a great job maintaining the theme of the story and still making it your signature.
ReplyDeleteHello AJ,
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you used the moral of the story to build the story around. It emphasized the message and made it clear that being devious or greedy can lead to bad situations. I also think your story flowed well, you set up the character very fully in the beginning of your story and I think that set a stable foundation for the rest of the plot that was to come. With that being said, I think the story ended a little abruptly; however, to function as a learning lesson type of story, I think that the ending was perfect. I have also derived a story from the original 'The Cunning Crane and the Crab' so I think you retold this lesson very well. I really enjoyed this story and think it would make a good short film, or even a children's book if the crime committed was changed to something more kid appropriate :)